RE: Stanley's Dreams vs His mom's expectations

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Your story has emotional depth, but would benefit from some more anecdotes around Stanley's relationship with his father and around his love for fashion design. It would also benefit from an edit to correct for spelling errors, grammatical inconsistencies, and punctuation, especially around dialogue. Taking time to edit your work would elevate a piece that already contains the makings of a quality story.



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In life do not allow anyone to take away your expectations.Also parents should allow their children to be, only advise them

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